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For correctly assessing the potential Risk factor and the amount of information available (Data available) about the device, please see [[Data Availability]] and [[Risk Factor|Risk factor]]. | For correctly assessing the potential Risk factor and the amount of information available (Data available) about the device, please see [[Data Availability]] and [[Risk Factor|Risk factor]]. | ||
| − | The infobox has incorrectly written values for the categories. For example, for the operating system category, simply writing iOS is enough. Category sensors is wrong. A LED diode is not a sensor but an indicator. The device is measuring brain waves, that is a form of a sensor. Take a look at other entries to see how to fix your infobox. | + | The infobox has incorrectly written values for the categories. For example, for the operating system category, simply writing iOS is enough. Category sensors is wrong. A LED diode is not a sensor but an indicator. The device is measuring brain waves, that is a form of a sensor. The weight category should contain only the number, remove the "Device:" part. Take a look at other entries to see how to fix your infobox. |
Do not use the second person narrative (You control...; You can also...; etc.) while writing about the device. You are not writing a piece of advertisement but a scientifically grounded text. The same applies to expressions such as "A soothing neck massage" or "so that you can enjoy". '''Be neutral.''' I am afraid you will have to rewrite most of your text because of that. | Do not use the second person narrative (You control...; You can also...; etc.) while writing about the device. You are not writing a piece of advertisement but a scientifically grounded text. The same applies to expressions such as "A soothing neck massage" or "so that you can enjoy". '''Be neutral.''' I am afraid you will have to rewrite most of your text because of that. | ||
When you are converting between two currencies, i.e. "$ 299 (= 7300 CZK)", please include a month and a year when that conversion was done. Currency rates are changing, and what was a correct conversion this year, may not be applicable in the next year. | When you are converting between two currencies, i.e. "$ 299 (= 7300 CZK)", please include a month and a year when that conversion was done. Currency rates are changing, and what was a correct conversion this year, may not be applicable in the next year. | ||
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| + | There are many parts of your entry directly copied from the Thync website. This is not really acceptable. Please write the information in your own words. | ||
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| + | Ethical issues, Media impact, Public policy and other sections are empty. If you think there may not be any Ethical issues for example, write that down as well. It's better than to have an empty section. | ||
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| + | I'm not sure about using Czech language sources. But this is something we will have to discuss with Ms Žáčková next time. | ||
| + | --[[User:Haustein|Haustein]] ([[User talk:Haustein|talk]]) 10:47, 16 November 2015 (CET) | ||
Revision as of 11:47, 16 November 2015
Do not create new items for the infobox. Adhere to the one you can find in Infobox (Wearables). --Haustein (talk) 11:17, 16 October 2015 (CEST)
Quora.com is not a reliable source of information. Yates Buckley may be a dabbling neuroscience fan but he does not appear to have a single paper published under his name.
Do not attribute references to a quote that is not in the reference text. I'm talking about reference no. 7 and the preceding quote. --Haustein (talk) 08:27, 9 November 2015 (CET)
For correctly assessing the potential Risk factor and the amount of information available (Data available) about the device, please see Data Availability and Risk factor.
The infobox has incorrectly written values for the categories. For example, for the operating system category, simply writing iOS is enough. Category sensors is wrong. A LED diode is not a sensor but an indicator. The device is measuring brain waves, that is a form of a sensor. The weight category should contain only the number, remove the "Device:" part. Take a look at other entries to see how to fix your infobox.
Do not use the second person narrative (You control...; You can also...; etc.) while writing about the device. You are not writing a piece of advertisement but a scientifically grounded text. The same applies to expressions such as "A soothing neck massage" or "so that you can enjoy". Be neutral. I am afraid you will have to rewrite most of your text because of that.
When you are converting between two currencies, i.e. "$ 299 (= 7300 CZK)", please include a month and a year when that conversion was done. Currency rates are changing, and what was a correct conversion this year, may not be applicable in the next year.
There are many parts of your entry directly copied from the Thync website. This is not really acceptable. Please write the information in your own words.
Ethical issues, Media impact, Public policy and other sections are empty. If you think there may not be any Ethical issues for example, write that down as well. It's better than to have an empty section.
I'm not sure about using Czech language sources. But this is something we will have to discuss with Ms Žáčková next time. --Haustein (talk) 10:47, 16 November 2015 (CET)
